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University essays differ from school essays in that they are less concerned with what you know and more concerned with how you construct an argument to answer the question. This means that the starting point for writing a strong essay is to first unpick the question and to then use this to plan your essay before you start putting pen to paper (or finger to keyboard).

A really good starting point for you are these short, downloadable Tips for Successful Essay Writing and Answering the Question resources. Both resources will help you to plan your essay, as well as giving you guidance on how to distinguish between different sorts of essay questions. 

You may find it helpful to watch this seven-minute video on six tips for essay writing which outlines how to interpret essay questions, as well as giving advice on planning and structuring your writing:

Different disciplines will have different expectations for essay structure and you should always refer to your Faculty or Department student handbook or course Canvas site for more specific guidance.

However, broadly speaking, all essays share the following features:

Essays need an introduction to establish and focus the parameters of the discussion that will follow. You may find it helpful to divide the introduction into areas to demonstrate your breadth and engagement with the essay question. You might define specific terms in the introduction to show your engagement with the essay question; for example, ‘This is a large topic which has been variously discussed by many scientists and commentators. The principle tension is between the views of X and Y who define the main issues as…’ Breadth might be demonstrated by showing the range of viewpoints from which the essay question could be considered; for example, ‘A variety of factors including economic, social and political, influence A and B. This essay will focus on the social and economic aspects, with particular emphasis on…..’

Watch this two-minute video to learn more about how to plan and structure an introduction:

The main body of the essay should elaborate on the issues raised in the introduction and develop an argument(s) that answers the question. It should consist of a number of self-contained paragraphs each of which makes a specific point and provides some form of evidence to support the argument being made. Remember that a clear argument requires that each paragraph explicitly relates back to the essay question or the developing argument.

• Conclusion: An essay should end with a conclusion that reiterates the argument in light of the evidence you have provided; you shouldn’t use the conclusion to introduce new information.
• References: You need to include references to the materials you’ve used to write your essay. These might be in the form of footnotes, in-text citations, or a bibliography at the end. Different systems exist for citing references and different disciplines will use various approaches to citation. Ask your tutor which method(s) you should be using for your essay and also consult your Department or Faculty webpages for specific guidance in your discipline. 

Essay writing in science subjects

If you are writing an essay for a science subject you may need to consider additional areas, such as how to present data or diagrams. This five-minute video gives you some advice on how to approach your reading list, planning which information to include in your answer and how to write for your scientific audience – the video is available here:

A PDF providing further guidance on writing science essays for tutorials is available to download.

Short videos to support your essay writing skills

There are many other resources at Oxford that can help support your essay writing skills and if you are short on time, the Oxford Study Skills Centre has produced a number of short (2-minute) videos covering different aspects of essay writing, including:

• Approaching different types of essay questions  
• Structuring your essay  
• Writing an introduction  
• Making use of evidence in your essay writing  
• Writing your conclusion

Extended essays and dissertations

Longer pieces of writing like extended essays and dissertations may seem like quite a challenge from your regular essay writing. The important point is to start with a plan and to focus on what the question is asking. A PDF providing further guidance on planning Humanities and Social Science dissertations is available to download.

Planning your time effectively

Try not to leave the writing until close to your deadline, instead start as soon as you have some ideas to put down onto paper. Your early drafts may never end up in the final work, but the work of committing your ideas to paper helps to formulate not only your ideas, but the method of structuring your writing to read well and conclude firmly.

Although many students and tutors will say that the introduction is often written last, it is a good idea to begin to think about what will go into it early on. For example, the first draft of your introduction should set out your argument, the information you have, and your methods, and it should give a structure to the chapters and sections you will write. Your introduction will probably change as time goes on but it will stand as a guide to your entire extended essay or dissertation and it will help you to keep focused.

The structure of  extended essays or dissertations will vary depending on the question and discipline, but may include some or all of the following:

• The background information to - and context for - your research. This often takes the form of a literature review.
• Explanation of the focus of your work.
• Explanation of the value of this work to scholarship on the topic.
• List of the aims and objectives of the work and also the issues which will not be covered because they are outside its scope.

The main body of your extended essay or dissertation will probably include your methodology, the results of research, and your argument(s) based on your findings.

The conclusion is to summarise the value your research has added to the topic, and any further lines of research you would undertake given more time or resources. 

Tips on writing longer pieces of work

Approaching each chapter of a dissertation as a shorter essay can make the task of writing a dissertation seem less overwhelming. Each chapter will have an introduction, a main body where the argument is developed and substantiated with evidence, and a conclusion to tie things together. Unlike in a regular essay, chapter conclusions may also introduce the chapter that will follow, indicating how the chapters are connected to one another and how the argument will develop through your dissertation.

For further guidance, watch this two-minute video on writing longer pieces of work . 

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This resource begins with a general description of essay writing and moves to a discussion of common essay genres students may encounter across the curriculum. The four genres of essays (description, narration, exposition, and argumentation) are common paper assignments you may encounter in your writing classes. Although these genres, also known as the modes of discourse, have been criticized by some composition scholars, the Purdue OWL recognizes the wide spread use of these genres and students’ need to understand and produce these types of essays. We hope these resources will help.

The essay is a commonly assigned form of writing that every student will encounter while in academia. Therefore, it is wise for the student to become capable and comfortable with this type of writing early on in her training.

Essays can be a rewarding and challenging type of writing and are often assigned either to be done in class, which requires previous planning and practice (and a bit of creativity) on the part of the student, or as homework, which likewise demands a certain amount of preparation. Many poorly crafted essays have been produced on account of a lack of preparation and confidence. However, students can avoid the discomfort often associated with essay writing by understanding some common genres.

Before delving into its various genres, let’s begin with a basic definition of the essay.

What is an essay?

Though the word essay has come to be understood as a type of writing in Modern English, its origins provide us with some useful insights. The word comes into the English language through the French influence on Middle English; tracing it back further, we find that the French form of the word comes from the Latin verb exigere , which means "to examine, test, or (literally) to drive out." Through the excavation of this ancient word, we are able to unearth the essence of the academic essay: to encourage students to test or examine their ideas concerning a particular topic.

Essays are shorter pieces of writing that often require the student to hone a number of skills such as close reading, analysis, comparison and contrast, persuasion, conciseness, clarity, and exposition. As is evidenced by this list of attributes, there is much to be gained by the student who strives to succeed at essay writing.

The purpose of an essay is to encourage students to develop ideas and concepts in their writing with the direction of little more than their own thoughts (it may be helpful to view the essay as the converse of a research paper). Therefore, essays are (by nature) concise and require clarity in purpose and direction. This means that there is no room for the student’s thoughts to wander or stray from his or her purpose; the writing must be deliberate and interesting.

This handout should help students become familiar and comfortable with the process of essay composition through the introduction of some common essay genres.

This handout includes a brief introduction to the following genres of essay writing:

• Expository essays
• Descriptive essays
• Narrative essays
• Argumentative (Persuasive) essays

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Sometimes a good example of what you are trying to achieve is worth a 1000 words of advice! When you are asked to write an essay, try to find some samples (models) of similar writing and learn to observe the craft of the writer. You can use the samples as a basis for working out how to write in the correct style.

About sample essays

Most books on essay writing will supply you with a number of model essays—collect some of these as they are great teachers! No matter what the topic is, you will see similarities between your writing tasks and these model essays. This is because many features of writing are common across subject areas. In some subjects (e.g. Law, Economics, Psychology and others), it is very useful to find subject -specific essay models as you can use these to work out the ‘peculiarities’ of writing for that subject area.

Read an academic essay

The following five paragraph essay has paragraph labels to show the parts of an academic essay. (Note: This essay does not contain authentic references and has been written specifically to use for this teaching task.)

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Using assignment essays for assessment supports student learning better than the traditional examination system. It is considered that course-work assignment essays can lessen the extreme stress experienced by some students over ‘sudden-death’ end of semester examinations:

If we insist that all students write about everything they have learned in their study courses at the same time and in the same place (e.g. in examinations), we are not giving all of our students equal opportunities. Some students are not daunted by the exam experience while others suffer ‘exam nerves’ and perform at the lowest level of their capabilities. (Wonderland University, 2006, p. 4)

Additionally, Jones et al. (2004, pp. 36-37) propose that assignment essays can be used to assess student learning mid-course and so provide them with helpful feedback before they are subjected to the exam experience. Exams only provide students with a mark rather than specific feedback on their progress. Therefore, setting assignment essays for a substantial part of student assessment is a much fairer approach than one-off examination testing.

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Sankey, J.M., & Liger, T.U. (2003).  Learning to write essays  [CD-ROM]. Sydney: Wonderland University.

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Yang, S., & Baker, O.E. (2005).  Essay writing and the tertiary student . Melbourne: Diamond Press.

Zapper, Y. (2006). Learning essay writing. In F.T. Fax & Y. Phoney (Eds.),  Learning Experiences at University  (pp. 55-70). Calcutta: Academic Scholar Press.

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Most students really appreciate seeing a finished product. If you are to really benefit from model essays, you need to learn how to read the ‘techniques of the writer’. The following exercise helps you to get started with developing your ‘read the writer’ skills.

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Need to defend your opinion on an issue? Argumentative essays are one of the most popular types of essays you’ll write in school. They combine persuasive arguments with fact-based research, and, when done well, can be powerful tools for making someone agree with your point of view. If you’re struggling to write an argumentative essay or just want to learn more about them, seeing examples can be a big help.

After giving an overview of this type of essay, we provide three argumentative essay examples. After each essay, we explain in-depth how the essay was structured, what worked, and where the essay could be improved. We end with tips for making your own argumentative essay as strong as possible.

What Is an Argumentative Essay?

An argumentative essay is an essay that uses evidence and facts to support the claim it’s making. Its purpose is to persuade the reader to agree with the argument being made.

A good argumentative essay will use facts and evidence to support the argument, rather than just the author’s thoughts and opinions. For example, say you wanted to write an argumentative essay stating that Charleston, SC is a great destination for families. You couldn’t just say that it’s a great place because you took your family there and enjoyed it. For it to be an argumentative essay, you need to have facts and data to support your argument, such as the number of child-friendly attractions in Charleston, special deals you can get with kids, and surveys of people who visited Charleston as a family and enjoyed it. The first argument is based entirely on feelings, whereas the second is based on evidence that can be proven.

The standard five paragraph format is common, but not required, for argumentative essays. These essays typically follow one of two formats: the Toulmin model or the Rogerian model.

• The Toulmin model is the most common. It begins with an introduction, follows with a thesis/claim, and gives data and evidence to support that claim. This style of essay also includes rebuttals of counterarguments.
• The Rogerian model analyzes two sides of an argument and reaches a conclusion after weighing the strengths and weaknesses of each.

3 Good Argumentative Essay Examples + Analysis

Below are three examples of argumentative essays, written by yours truly in my school days, as well as analysis of what each did well and where it could be improved.

Argumentative Essay Example 1

Proponents of this idea state that it will save local cities and towns money because libraries are expensive to maintain. They also believe it will encourage more people to read because they won’t have to travel to a library to get a book; they can simply click on what they want to read and read it from wherever they are. They could also access more materials because libraries won’t have to buy physical copies of books; they can simply rent out as many digital copies as they need.

However, it would be a serious mistake to replace libraries with tablets. First, digital books and resources are associated with less learning and more problems than print resources. A study done on tablet vs book reading found that people read 20-30% slower on tablets, retain 20% less information, and understand 10% less of what they read compared to people who read the same information in print. Additionally, staring too long at a screen has been shown to cause numerous health problems, including blurred vision, dizziness, dry eyes, headaches, and eye strain, at much higher instances than reading print does. People who use tablets and mobile devices excessively also have a higher incidence of more serious health issues such as fibromyalgia, shoulder and back pain, carpal tunnel syndrome, and muscle strain. I know that whenever I read from my e-reader for too long, my eyes begin to feel tired and my neck hurts. We should not add to these problems by giving people, especially young people, more reasons to look at screens.

Second, it is incredibly narrow-minded to assume that the only service libraries offer is book lending. Libraries have a multitude of benefits, and many are only available if the library has a physical location. Some of these benefits include acting as a quiet study space, giving people a way to converse with their neighbors, holding classes on a variety of topics, providing jobs, answering patron questions, and keeping the community connected. One neighborhood found that, after a local library instituted community events such as play times for toddlers and parents, job fairs for teenagers, and meeting spaces for senior citizens, over a third of residents reported feeling more connected to their community. Similarly, a Pew survey conducted in 2015 found that nearly two-thirds of American adults feel that closing their local library would have a major impact on their community. People see libraries as a way to connect with others and get their questions answered, benefits tablets can’t offer nearly as well or as easily.

While replacing libraries with tablets may seem like a simple solution, it would encourage people to spend even more time looking at digital screens, despite the myriad issues surrounding them. It would also end access to many of the benefits of libraries that people have come to rely on. In many areas, libraries are such an important part of the community network that they could never be replaced by a simple object.

The author begins by giving an overview of the counter-argument, then the thesis appears as the first sentence in the third paragraph. The essay then spends the rest of the paper dismantling the counter argument and showing why readers should believe the other side.

What this essay does well:

• Although it’s a bit unusual to have the thesis appear fairly far into the essay, it works because, once the thesis is stated, the rest of the essay focuses on supporting it since the counter-argument has already been discussed earlier in the paper.
• This essay includes numerous facts and cites studies to support its case. By having specific data to rely on, the author’s argument is stronger and readers will be more inclined to agree with it.
• For every argument the other side makes, the author makes sure to refute it and follow up with why her opinion is the stronger one. In order to make a strong argument, it’s important to dismantle the other side, which this essay does this by making the author's view appear stronger.
• This is a shorter paper, and if it needed to be expanded to meet length requirements, it could include more examples and go more into depth with them, such as by explaining specific cases where people benefited from local libraries.
• Additionally, while the paper uses lots of data, the author also mentions their own experience with using tablets. This should be removed since argumentative essays focus on facts and data to support an argument, not the author’s own opinion or experiences. Replacing that with more data on health issues associated with screen time would strengthen the essay.
• Some of the points made aren't completely accurate , particularly the one about digital books being cheaper. It actually often costs a library more money to rent out numerous digital copies of a book compared to buying a single physical copy. Make sure in your own essay you thoroughly research each of the points and rebuttals you make, otherwise you'll look like you don't know the issue that well.

Argumentative Essay Example 2

There are multiple drugs available to treat malaria, and many of them work well and save lives, but malaria eradication programs that focus too much on them and not enough on prevention haven’t seen long-term success in Sub-Saharan Africa. A major program to combat malaria was WHO’s Global Malaria Eradication Programme. Started in 1955, it had a goal of eliminating malaria in Africa within the next ten years. Based upon previously successful programs in Brazil and the United States, the program focused mainly on vector control. This included widely distributing chloroquine and spraying large amounts of DDT. More than one billion dollars was spent trying to abolish malaria. However, the program suffered from many problems and in 1969, WHO was forced to admit that the program had not succeeded in eradicating malaria. The number of people in Sub-Saharan Africa who contracted malaria as well as the number of malaria deaths had actually increased over 10% during the time the program was active.

One of the major reasons for the failure of the project was that it set uniform strategies and policies. By failing to consider variations between governments, geography, and infrastructure, the program was not nearly as successful as it could have been. Sub-Saharan Africa has neither the money nor the infrastructure to support such an elaborate program, and it couldn’t be run the way it was meant to. Most African countries don't have the resources to send all their people to doctors and get shots, nor can they afford to clear wetlands or other malaria prone areas. The continent’s spending per person for eradicating malaria was just a quarter of what Brazil spent. Sub-Saharan Africa simply can’t rely on a plan that requires more money, infrastructure, and expertise than they have to spare.

Additionally, the widespread use of chloroquine has created drug resistant parasites which are now plaguing Sub-Saharan Africa. Because chloroquine was used widely but inconsistently, mosquitoes developed resistance, and chloroquine is now nearly completely ineffective in Sub-Saharan Africa, with over 95% of mosquitoes resistant to it. As a result, newer, more expensive drugs need to be used to prevent and treat malaria, which further drives up the cost of malaria treatment for a region that can ill afford it.

Instead of developing plans to treat malaria after the infection has incurred, programs should focus on preventing infection from occurring in the first place. Not only is this plan cheaper and more effective, reducing the number of people who contract malaria also reduces loss of work/school days which can further bring down the productivity of the region.

One of the cheapest and most effective ways of preventing malaria is to implement insecticide-treated bed nets (ITNs).  These nets provide a protective barrier around the person or people using them. While untreated bed nets are still helpful, those treated with insecticides are much more useful because they stop mosquitoes from biting people through the nets, and they help reduce mosquito populations in a community, thus helping people who don’t even own bed nets.  Bed nets are also very effective because most mosquito bites occur while the person is sleeping, so bed nets would be able to drastically reduce the number of transmissions during the night. In fact, transmission of malaria can be reduced by as much as 90% in areas where the use of ITNs is widespread. Because money is so scarce in Sub-Saharan Africa, the low cost is a great benefit and a major reason why the program is so successful. Bed nets cost roughly 2 USD to make, last several years, and can protect two adults. Studies have shown that, for every 100-1000 more nets are being used, one less child dies of malaria. With an estimated 300 million people in Africa not being protected by mosquito nets, there’s the potential to save three million lives by spending just a few dollars per person.

Reducing the number of people who contract malaria would also reduce poverty levels in Africa significantly, thus improving other aspects of society like education levels and the economy. Vector control is more effective than treatment strategies because it means fewer people are getting sick. When fewer people get sick, the working population is stronger as a whole because people are not put out of work from malaria, nor are they caring for sick relatives. Malaria-afflicted families can typically only harvest 40% of the crops that healthy families can harvest. Additionally, a family with members who have malaria spends roughly a quarter of its income treatment, not including the loss of work they also must deal with due to the illness. It’s estimated that malaria costs Africa 12 billion USD in lost income every year. A strong working population creates a stronger economy, which Sub-Saharan Africa is in desperate need of.  

This essay begins with an introduction, which ends with the thesis (that malaria eradication plans in Sub-Saharan Africa should focus on prevention rather than treatment). The first part of the essay lays out why the counter argument (treatment rather than prevention) is not as effective, and the second part of the essay focuses on why prevention of malaria is the better path to take.

• The thesis appears early, is stated clearly, and is supported throughout the rest of the essay. This makes the argument clear for readers to understand and follow throughout the essay.
• There’s lots of solid research in this essay, including specific programs that were conducted and how successful they were, as well as specific data mentioned throughout. This evidence helps strengthen the author’s argument.
• The author makes a case for using expanding bed net use over waiting until malaria occurs and beginning treatment, but not much of a plan is given for how the bed nets would be distributed or how to ensure they’re being used properly. By going more into detail of what she believes should be done, the author would be making a stronger argument.
• The introduction of the essay does a good job of laying out the seriousness of the problem, but the conclusion is short and abrupt. Expanding it into its own paragraph would give the author a final way to convince readers of her side of the argument.

Argumentative Essay Example 3

There are many ways payments could work. They could be in the form of a free-market approach, where athletes are able to earn whatever the market is willing to pay them, it could be a set amount of money per athlete, or student athletes could earn income from endorsements, autographs, and control of their likeness, similar to the way top Olympians earn money.

Proponents of the idea believe that, because college athletes are the ones who are training, participating in games, and bringing in audiences, they should receive some sort of compensation for their work. If there were no college athletes, the NCAA wouldn’t exist, college coaches wouldn’t receive there (sometimes very high) salaries, and brands like Nike couldn’t profit from college sports. In fact, the NCAA brings in roughly $1 billion in revenue a year, but college athletes don’t receive any of that money in the form of a paycheck. Additionally, people who believe college athletes should be paid state that paying college athletes will actually encourage them to remain in college longer and not turn pro as quickly, either by giving them a way to begin earning money in college or requiring them to sign a contract stating they’ll stay at the university for a certain number of years while making an agreed-upon salary.  

Supporters of this idea point to Zion Williamson, the Duke basketball superstar, who, during his freshman year, sustained a serious knee injury. Many argued that, even if he enjoyed playing for Duke, it wasn’t worth risking another injury and ending his professional career before it even began for a program that wasn’t paying him. Williamson seems to have agreed with them and declared his eligibility for the NCAA draft later that year. If he was being paid, he may have stayed at Duke longer. In fact, roughly a third of student athletes surveyed stated that receiving a salary while in college would make them “strongly consider” remaining collegiate athletes longer before turning pro.

Paying athletes could also stop the recruitment scandals that have plagued the NCAA. In 2018, the NCAA stripped the University of Louisville's men's basketball team of its 2013 national championship title because it was discovered coaches were using sex workers to entice recruits to join the team. There have been dozens of other recruitment scandals where college athletes and recruits have been bribed with anything from having their grades changed, to getting free cars, to being straight out bribed. By paying college athletes and putting their salaries out in the open, the NCAA could end the illegal and underhanded ways some schools and coaches try to entice athletes to join.

People who argue against the idea of paying college athletes believe the practice could be disastrous for college sports. By paying athletes, they argue, they’d turn college sports into a bidding war, where only the richest schools could afford top athletes, and the majority of schools would be shut out from developing a talented team (though some argue this already happens because the best players often go to the most established college sports programs, who typically pay their coaches millions of dollars per year). It could also ruin the tight camaraderie of many college teams if players become jealous that certain teammates are making more money than they are.

They also argue that paying college athletes actually means only a small fraction would make significant money. Out of the 350 Division I athletic departments, fewer than a dozen earn any money. Nearly all the money the NCAA makes comes from men’s football and basketball, so paying college athletes would make a small group of men--who likely will be signed to pro teams and begin making millions immediately out of college--rich at the expense of other players.

Those against paying college athletes also believe that the athletes are receiving enough benefits already. The top athletes already receive scholarships that are worth tens of thousands per year, they receive free food/housing/textbooks, have access to top medical care if they are injured, receive top coaching, get travel perks and free gear, and can use their time in college as a way to capture the attention of professional recruiters. No other college students receive anywhere near as much from their schools.

People on this side also point out that, while the NCAA brings in a massive amount of money each year, it is still a non-profit organization. How? Because over 95% of those profits are redistributed to its members’ institutions in the form of scholarships, grants, conferences, support for Division II and Division III teams, and educational programs. Taking away a significant part of that revenue would hurt smaller programs that rely on that money to keep running.

While both sides have good points, it’s clear that the negatives of paying college athletes far outweigh the positives. College athletes spend a significant amount of time and energy playing for their school, but they are compensated for it by the scholarships and perks they receive. Adding a salary to that would result in a college athletic system where only a small handful of athletes (those likely to become millionaires in the professional leagues) are paid by a handful of schools who enter bidding wars to recruit them, while the majority of student athletics and college athletic programs suffer or even shut down for lack of money. Continuing to offer the current level of benefits to student athletes makes it possible for as many people to benefit from and enjoy college sports as possible.

This argumentative essay follows the Rogerian model. It discusses each side, first laying out multiple reasons people believe student athletes should be paid, then discussing reasons why the athletes shouldn’t be paid. It ends by stating that college athletes shouldn’t be paid by arguing that paying them would destroy college athletics programs and cause them to have many of the issues professional sports leagues have.

• Both sides of the argument are well developed, with multiple reasons why people agree with each side. It allows readers to get a full view of the argument and its nuances.
• Certain statements on both sides are directly rebuffed in order to show where the strengths and weaknesses of each side lie and give a more complete and sophisticated look at the argument.
• Using the Rogerian model can be tricky because oftentimes you don’t explicitly state your argument until the end of the paper. Here, the thesis doesn’t appear until the first sentence of the final paragraph. That doesn’t give readers a lot of time to be convinced that your argument is the right one, compared to a paper where the thesis is stated in the beginning and then supported throughout the paper. This paper could be strengthened if the final paragraph was expanded to more fully explain why the author supports the view, or if the paper had made it clearer that paying athletes was the weaker argument throughout.

3 Tips for Writing a Good Argumentative Essay

Now that you’ve seen examples of what good argumentative essay samples look like, follow these three tips when crafting your own essay.

#1: Make Your Thesis Crystal Clear

The thesis is the key to your argumentative essay; if it isn’t clear or readers can’t find it easily, your entire essay will be weak as a result. Always make sure that your thesis statement is easy to find. The typical spot for it is the final sentence of the introduction paragraph, but if it doesn’t fit in that spot for your essay, try to at least put it as the first or last sentence of a different paragraph so it stands out more.

Also make sure that your thesis makes clear what side of the argument you’re on. After you’ve written it, it’s a great idea to show your thesis to a couple different people--classmates are great for this. Just by reading your thesis they should be able to understand what point you’ll be trying to make with the rest of your essay.

#2: Show Why the Other Side Is Weak

When writing your essay, you may be tempted to ignore the other side of the argument and just focus on your side, but don’t do this. The best argumentative essays really tear apart the other side to show why readers shouldn’t believe it. Before you begin writing your essay, research what the other side believes, and what their strongest points are. Then, in your essay, be sure to mention each of these and use evidence to explain why they’re incorrect/weak arguments. That’ll make your essay much more effective than if you only focused on your side of the argument.

#3: Use Evidence to Support Your Side

Remember, an essay can’t be an argumentative essay if it doesn’t support its argument with evidence. For every point you make, make sure you have facts to back it up. Some examples are previous studies done on the topic, surveys of large groups of people, data points, etc. There should be lots of numbers in your argumentative essay that support your side of the argument. This will make your essay much stronger compared to only relying on your own opinions to support your argument.

Summary: Argumentative Essay Sample

Argumentative essays are persuasive essays that use facts and evidence to support their side of the argument. Most argumentative essays follow either the Toulmin model or the Rogerian model. By reading good argumentative essay examples, you can learn how to develop your essay and provide enough support to make readers agree with your opinion. When writing your essay, remember to always make your thesis clear, show where the other side is weak, and back up your opinion with data and evidence.

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FCE Essay Examples:  Topic (Environment) 

Example exam task:, example answer (grade: 3), example answer:.

I think that my country has problems with pollution to the environment like all other countries. This problem is normal for Russia. We have big problems with transport because there are too much cars in our country. And because of that we have problems with atmospeer, air in my city and in all Russia is really dirty and sometimes I can’t make a sigh because it smells around me and of course around that cars on the road. I’ve heard about tradition of one country. They don’t go anywhere by car one day a month or a year, they just use bycicle or their feet. I think it could be very good if we had a tradition like that.

So, what about the rivers and the seas? Yeah, there are some really good and clean rivers and seas where you can go, but there are not many of them. Once I saw the river OB in my city, it was about two years ago but I stil remember that in some places it was not blue, it was green or purple I didn’t really understand because it had different colours.

I don’t know what should we do. Maybe we should just open our eyes and look what we did. But Russian people don’t care about the world around them many people care only about themselves an that’s all.

So, the best idea is look around and try to do something good for our planet and for us and our children.

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Practice, write & improve, examiners comments & grade:, example answer (grade: 3-4).

To begin with pollution and damage to the environment is the most serious and difficult problem for countries of all over the world. Scientists of different countries predict a global ecocatastrophe if people won’t change their attitude to our planet.

First of all a huge damage to the environment brings a transport. People can’t imagine their living without cars, buses, trains, ships and planes. But it’s an open secret that one of disadvantage of these accustomed things is harmful exhaust. Needless to say that use of environment friendly engines helps us to save atmosphere from pollution.

In addition to this our rivers and seas are in not less danger situation. It’s a fact of common knowledge that numerous factories and plants pour off their waste to ponds. Obviously that cleaning manufacturing water helps to avoid extinction of ocean residents.

Apart from this I’m inclined to believe that every person can and must contribute to solving this important problem. Doing a little steps for protection our environment every day we will be able to save our Earth. And it’s a task of each of us.

Model Answer (Grade: 5)

DEVELOPMENT VS ENVIRONMENT

If we surf the web looking for pollution and environmental catastrophes, we will find out that every country in the world suffers them. This is a natural consequence of the struggle between development and environment.

If a country decided to live isolated from the rest of the world, living on what it can naturally grow and produce, it surely wouldn’t be highly polluted. But we all want exotic food and technological items from all over the world, so we have to pay the price.

Investing on electrical transport would benefit the environment a lot. Even more if this electricity came from a natural source of energy like wind, rivers and solar boards. It’s difficult to achieve this because petrol companies will fight against these actions.

We also have to take care of our rivers and seas. We all have heard about factories throwing highly toxic substances to rivers, without minimizing their poisoning effects. A really strict law should be applied to fine these factories and make them change their policy.

But what about ourselves? We also can do a lot! If, when possible, we bought larger packs of food, we would be producing less rubbish. And this is only an example!

FCE Essay Examples: Topic (Fashion) 

In today’s world, the fashion industry has a strong importance in people’s lives. The fashion industry say to the society what to wear and creates new types of clothes all the time.

Some people claim that the fashion industry has a bad effect on people’s lives, they say that the fashion industry creates clothes that the society has to wear. Furthermore, the clothes’ price is extremely high and people, who can’t afford it, should not be in the society.

In the other hand, the fashion industry guide the people to be in a good appearance, because, nowadays, the appearance of the person is more important than the person itself.

In my opinion, the fashion industry doesn’t has a bad influence on people’s lives. It’s something which was created to help people what to wear.

Example Answer (Grade: 4)

Fashion industry is very a discussed subject nowadays: they create and design new clothes everyday in order to satisfy some people needs.

There are many people who claim that the fashion industry is important and good for society. According to them, this industry design beautiful clothes and thanks to that every person can wear shirts, trousers or any acessory which is on today’s fashion.

On the other hand, the fashion industry in some people opinion, controls the market of clothes and because of that they can’t wear what they want to. In addition, the industry can increase the price of clothes, forcing people who don’t want to be “oldfashioned” to buy and pay a large amount of money to keep “beautiful”.

In my opinion, we can’t let the fashion industry decide what we must or musn’t wear. We shouldn’t judge people for its appearance,because that is not important. We must wear whatever we like, want and feel confortable with.

The society we live today is characterised by technology in constant development, fast speed processes, information travelling and getting to people at a blink of an eye and a complex web of social networking. In this context, the fashion industry is becoming increasingly important and having a more and more paramount role in our lives.

On one hand, the fashion industry is undeniably a source of profit and income. It hires millions of people all over the world and generates millions of dollars every year. Furthermore, such profitable business is also believed to be able to spread and make known the culture of a people, encouraging and enhancing a better understanding of each other.

Nevertheless, for those who are neither impressed nor motivated by numbers and figures, the fashion industry is seen as one which segregates people, isolating those who not fit their laws and commands. It is stated that people place too much importance on appearance and the material, world, sadly true, and the fashion industry just spurs on such situation. Moreover, not only are the costs of fashion item unrealistically high, it is thought to be a money better spent on more pressing issues, such as poverty and hunger.

I do believe that the fashion industry, as it is today, has a harmful effect, because it values a minority of people in detriment to the majority. However, it has such a wide reach that, it put into a good use, it can save lives.

FCE Essay Examples: Topic (Languages) 

“There are more reasons to learn a foreign language than to pass a test”

Everything around us revolves around language(s), it is the most important thing in our lives. Society would just not function without it. They are It is our future and I would personaly love to learn as many as I possibly can.

Not everything in life is done because it is necessary. Learning a new language can be a lot of fun. Many people only do it as a hoby, or their knowledge is something that brings them pride and pleasure.

Secondly, we have people who do it simply to challenge themselves. Truly I believe that having a great outcome that stems from your hard work and dedication to learn something new is a wonderful way to challenge prove your ability to yourself and others. Then there is travelling. It is very important to be able to understand and have a conversation with someone abroad, unless you would like to get lost or worse.

To conclude, I think that learning a new language is an amazing thing no matter why you do it. It is always better to do things out of enjoyment, but even if you do it for a test, that knowledge will always be useful.

Learning a a foreign languages is very important nowadays. English, in particular, is essential because it allows is spoken all over the world. That’s the reason why we start studying it from the age of six years old. Going abroad and being able to speak to native people is very satisfying and that’s why I want to improve my knowledge about foreign languages.

I decided to take this exam to know how high my level of English is, but also because I need this certification to go abroad next summer. I really want to come back to Cornwall, an amazing region in the South-West of England. I’ve been there twice with my family, but now I want to go alone. Only being there to England I can really improve my English comprehension and speaking skills.

Fortunately I can will have some English lessons which taught in English at university and I can’t wait for it because it will be an interesting challenge for me. Studying foreign languages is essential to live and to travel. It isn’t simple and I surely have to challenge myself everyday, but the result is so satisfying that we I can’t do without it.

FCE Essay Example: Topic (History) 

A very common topic that is being discussed nowadays is wether schools should teach subjects that some may consider useless later in life. A clear example is history, since it is quite difficult to learn and does not help us in day-to-day activities.

However, many people do not realize the importance of it or that it affects our lives today. For example, our political system would not be this way if it weren’t for the Ancient Greeks, numerous politicians and wars who helped shape democracy and our constitution. Yet it is still thought that it’s useless.

In addition, it is very important that we never forget about our past since we must know where we were standing years ago. Moreover, there are some things, such as World War II, that we have to remember to prevent them from happening again. We should also know where we we were standing a century ago: our origins, our identity. The more you learn about your ethnicity, the better.

All in all, I think that it is extremely important to learn about one’s own country’s history. Anyone who gets the chance to do this should not waste it, since they are very fortunate to have this opportunity

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• RL.4.10: By the end of the year, read and comprehend literature, including stories, dramas, and poetry, in the grades 4-5 text complexity band proficiently, with scaffolding as needed at the high end of the range.
• RI.4.10: By the end of year, read and comprehend informational texts, including history/social studies, science, and technical texts, in the grades 4-5 text complexity band proficiently, with scaffolding as needed at the high end of the range.
• W.4.2: Write informative/explanatory texts to examine a topic and convey ideas and information clearly.
• W.4.4: Produce clear and coherent writing in which the development and organization are appropriate to task, purpose, and audience.
• W.4.5: With guidance and support from peers and adults, develop and strengthen writing as needed by planning, revising, and editing.
• I can use the Painted Essay structure to analyze a model. ( W.4.2, W.4.4, W.4.5 )
• Painted Essay(r) template
• Prepare the materials required for the Painted Essay (see Materials).
• Preview the Painting an Essay lesson plan to familiarize yourself with what will be required of students (see supporting materials).
• Post: Learning target and Working to Become Ethical People anchor chart.

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• Work Time A: Rather than using colored pencils on the displayed model literary essay, consider highlighting or using colored text on a word-processing document.

Supports guided in part by CA ELD Standards and 4.I.B.6 and 4.II.A.1

Important points in the lesson itself

• The basic design of this lesson supports ELLs with opportunities to unpack an example of the work they are expected to complete during the remainder of the unit. They are also empowered to use a color-coding system that will help them understand essay structure using visual prompts.
• ELLs may find it challenging to absorb an abundance of information and terminology about essay structure. Remind students that this structure is an expanded version of the paragraph structure they completed in prior lessons. Think aloud each part while analyzing the model essay in order to clarify the purpose of each component of the structure. Reassure students that even if they do not understand everything today, they will have plenty of opportunities to work with the concepts throughout the unit and the year.
• In Work Time A, ELLs are invited to participate in an optional Language Dive. This conversation guides them through expanding the meaning of the focus statement in the model literary essay. It also provides students with further practice using the language structure from the model literary essay focus statement. Students may draw on this sentence when writing their informative essays later in the unit. A consistent Language Dive routine is critical in helping all students learn how to decipher compelling sentences and write their own. In addition, Language Dive conversations hasten overall English language development for ELLs. Preview the Language Dive Guide and consider how to invite conversation among students to address the questions and goals suggested under each sentence strip chunk (see supporting materials). Select from the questions and goals provided to best meet your students' needs. Consider providing students with a Language Dive log inside a folder to track Language Dive sentences and structures and collate Language Dive note-catchers.

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For lighter support:

• During the Language Dive, challenge students to generate questions about the sentence before asking the prepared questions. Example: "What questions can we ask about this sentence? Let's see if we can answer them together." (What does it mean to find inspiration?)

For heavier support:

• Create a puzzle of the model literary essay using index cards. Paste each paragraph on a different index card. Use colored index cards according to the established Painted Essay colors. Challenge students to put the paragraph together in the correct order without looking at their papers.
• Multiple Means of Representation (MMR): In Work Time A, students analyze a model essay in preparation to write their own essay. Help students engage with the model essay in multiple ways. Color-code the model on display with the same colors that the students use during the Painted Essay exercise.
• Multiple Means of Action and Expression (MMAE): In the basic structure of this lesson, students get multiple representation cues with the color-coding provided by the Painted EssayO template. However, some students may find covering the entire essay in one lesson overwhelming. Consider chunking the explicit instruction for each part of the essay into multiple lessons to provide time for students to comprehend new information.
• Multiple Means of Engagement (MME): This lesson continues work that students will use to write an informational essay on their expert group's poet. Build engagement for the informational essay by telling students that they get to become experts about a specific poet. Then they will be able to teach others all about the poet and demonstrate their knowledge.

Key:  Lesson-Specific Vocabulary (L); Text-Specific Vocabulary (T); Vocabulary Used in Writing (W)

• The Painted Essay, structure, analyze (L)
• Model literary essay (one per student and one to display)
• Informative Essay Prompt: What Inspires Poets? (from Lesson 6, one per student and one to display)
• Vocabulary logs (from Unit 1, Lesson 3; one per student)
• Annotated model literary essay (for teacher reference)
• Painted Essay(r) template (one per student)
• Paintbrushes (one per student)
• Read, yellow, blue, and green watercolor paint (one set per pair)
• Cups of water (one per pair)
• Painting an Essay lesson plan (for teacher reference)
• Red, yellow, blue, and green colored pencils (one set; for teacher modeling)
• Paper (blank; one per student)
• Informative Writing Checklist (one per student and one to display)
• Language Dive Guide: Model Literary Essay (optional; for ELLs; for teacher reference)
• Language Dive Note-catcher: Model Literary Essay (optional; for ELLs; one per student and one to display)
• Language Dive Sentence strip chunks: Model Literary Essay (one to display)
• Working to Become Ethical People anchor chart (begun in Unit 1, Lesson 2)
• Independent Reading: Sample Plan ( see the Tools page ; for teacher reference)

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Below is an example of a band score 9 IELTS writing task 2 model essay. The task is a direct questions essay which is quite common in IELTS. Read it carefully and pay attention to the structure of the essay, the linkers and the sentence structures.

Essay Question

Art is considered an important part of a society  as well as an expression of its culture. Do you think it is important for children to be taught art? Do you think children should be encouraged to focus on art rather than other subjects?

Model Answer

It is commonly believed that art plays a fundamental role in society as artists are able to express their thoughts and their culture in their work. In my opinion, children should definitely learn art because they can develop creativity and learn to express themselves in their art work but it should not be taught to the detriment of other subjects.

Firstly, art is an essential subject which children, especially young children, should learn in order to help promote their creativity and imagination. Without the development of imagination and creative thinking, children will struggle to grow into dynamic, individual thinkers when they reach adulthood. Furthermore, some children are particularly gifted in their creative abilities and studying art can help them nurture their talents.

Another important advantage for children when practicing art is that it provides a medium through which they can express their emotions and feelings. In other words, young children do not have the linguistic capabilities to put their ideas into language and thus communicate directly. Therefore, by using art, they are able to convey meaning through pictures and symbols. For this reason, many child psychologists often study the art work of children to gain an insight into what they think and feel.

Finally, however, regardless of how useful the study of art is for children, this should not result in more focus being placed on art rather than other subjects. Children need to have a balance of all subjects so as to facilitate a healthy development both mentally and physically. Thus, ensuring that there is a healthy balance of art, sciences, languages and physical education in the school syllabus is essential.

In conclusion, while art certainly helps a child develop creativity as well as express their thoughts, it should be taught equally alongside all other subjects. A school curriculum should offer a balance of subjects.

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Art is crucial for a society to thrive and for the expression of its values. It gives chaos of the world order. I believe art should be introduced and taught to children and it should be encouraged to pursue art as a career if a child is passionate enough about it.

Art is very necessary for children. It acts as a vessel for a growing mind to express itself. Many children these days are so absorbed in studies these days that they hardly find time for some leisure activity. Extra co-curricular activities and passion projects are becoming obsolete in this age of competition. Art subjects can act as shelter in this time. Expression and letting out of emotions through music, painting, filmmaking, and photography can be very beneficial for our young. It imparts them emotional stability and gives them a chance to express themselves. These days many children who are differently abled express themselves through abstract art.

Some people consider art an entertaining pursuit only and don’t even want to consider it as a profession and think their children should only study other subjects, but I feel the young generation should be encouraged to make their career in any form of art if they are enthusiastic about it and art should be made available to them as major subject. Gone are the days when only doctors and engineers used to make decent money. These days artists and many professionals of this domain make a hefty amount of money through their services. Many TV channels, media houses, and bands are available to hire people who are equipped with skills. Social media has imparted content creators a very special power to yield in modern times and they don’t need those old-school auditions and red tape to make their content available to the public.

In the bottom line, I’d say young people should be taught art and meanwhile, if any curious mind is really interested in it then it should be available to them as a subject and part of their curriculum. I feel proper awareness and knowledge is the key in this case.

It’s common sense that art is a substantial part of a society as well as an expression of its culture. A good inheritance of traditional cultures and customs is vital to a civilization. Besides these, there are also many practical benefits for the children to learn art.

Primarily, learning art cultivates the kids’ ability of admiring beauties, builds a foundation of what is beautiful and ugly. Secondly, topics about artworks can always be a good method to connect with people and make friends, which will bring the children a kinder social atmosphere in a grown-up society of the future. People with good taste in artworks and creations are highly likely to be welcomed and appreciated. Because it shows you are well-educated, upper-class or at least, a person who has deep thought.

However, I disagree with the idea that children should be encouraged to focus simply on art rather than other subjects. It depends on the characters of the children we are talking about, and 2 important dimensionalities should be considered: the individual willingness and how talented they are.

For the talented children, I think it’s better to spend the majority of their time on the gifts they are good at. Because they have great possibilities to achieve great success, the premise of which is their willingness is the same. Considering children’s willingness is necessary because it will make the whole thing become their own vision rather than the fate forced on them. In any circumstances, we should put the respect of individuals into the first priority, even if they are only children.

For the majority of ordinary people, the best choice might be to regard art as a compulsory lesson as other subjects. Because people without extinct talent need to acquire enough basic knowledge to have the ability to survive in the competing world. The more they learn, the more chances they can find relative strength from all the subjects.

The most important way to express culture is often seen to be art, perceived to be necessary in each and every society made teaching it to little kids a necessity, however, encouraging them to think of it as a career instead of a hobby is unrecommended due to lack of opportunities in such domains.

One clear benefit of teaching art to children is the effect artistical activity have on brain development, increasing mental resilience and as a result, augmenting their capacity to learn new and different skills effectively and efficiently. for instance, drawing shown to foster creativity while playing an instrument is proved by science to improve memory and increase intelligence. In other words, children who study art will have a huge advantage in contrast with their peers when it comes to success in both education and work.

Despite art being of great benefits to people of all ages, encouraging children to direct their attention to art is often unrecommended, owing to the lack of job prospects, making it quite hard to have a stable source of income being an artist. An unfortunate phenomenon, observed in the USA, is the high rates of people changing profession, after graduating from art schools, making art less reliable as a way to pay the bills.

to conclude, art proved to have great benefits to children mental development, nevertheless, it’s often seen as a nonprofitable activity proving that the rightest thing to do is to push young people to be realistic and focus on their careers investing time and effort in more profitable domains.

I need feedback for my writing. Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems,as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is not as easy as we think, it varies from person to person,place,time and situation though we have to face problems. Here, it is stated that living is toughest in other countries being foreigners. It is a serious problem that every person needs to face at the time of speaking which causes great impact on social as well as practical life of human beings.In this essay, I will argue that problem being raised in societies for living,as well as finding jobs.

In context to social problems,living is really the toughest task to compete for a person to adjust and get settled in foreign culture. The most common problem among all is the language barrier, because it acts as a great wall for understanding between a native foreign speaker and an international citizen. Beside these, cultural norms and values may not be familiar,where people who come from out of the country celebrate it according to their country, which is not acceptable in the societies of people in foriegn nations.

On the other hand,lack of communication skills and proper confidence in speaking the language job placement would not be in favor. For instance, if any company gave the opportunities to work for them and unfortunately they knew that linguistic problem you have been facing then there is a chance of losing the job. Likewise, traveling within cities creates difficulties to find out the special destination they were looking for.

To sum up,the foriegn traveler should first practically as well as socially prepared to tackle any sorts of problems and difficulties they would probably get in their way while living as citizens of another country.

Art permeates our life and society and plays a pivotal role in cultural expression. I will discuss why I assume that it is crucial to teach children art, yet, we do not have to necessarily encourage them to concentrate on art other than their favorites.

Considering the merits of art education, it is reasonable to teach them in their childhood. First of all, art boosts creativity significantly. By drawing something in the blank and coming up with ideas, children learn how to create an unprecedented image by themselves. This is the variance of the invention that we expect from scientists or engineers. Therefore, children’s art class gives a resource of creativity simply more than fun.

However, does this indicate that we are obliged to prioritize art except for other subjects for children? We do not have to focus on only art since everyone has their own aptitude. Some people develop successfully their careers by playing sports or instruments at a young age. It demonstrates that not only art but also other subjects can aid them to cultivate their specialized ability. If a child prefers cooking to art or is called a piano prodigy by critics, should we encourage this young boy to sketch, paint regularly? It is very likely that he could waste his time, effort, and flair instead of benefiting from art class.

In conclusion, I believe that teaching children art is absolutely advantageous given its creativity development, although this does not imply that we should make children intensely learn the art.

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It’s a useful word to know.

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Firstly, your website is a really good source of information. Thank you.

I was practicing this essay and wanted to know how does the model answer address the statement of “Art is considered an important part of society as well as an expression of its culture”

Or is it not needed? I had an impression that the first paragraph after the introduction could probably address the statement made.

In this particular essay question, the first part is setting the scene. It provides context. Your task is to follow instructions. You have two questions to answer within the context given. There is no question which says “Do you think art is an important part of society? or “Do you think art is an expression of culture”. You need to identify if the statement given in the question is background context or if the instructions ask you to address it.

Wow! I’m so grateful ma’am for this your wonderful website full of knowledge. Indeed, I have learnt a lot and I hope that with these your tips, model essays and teachings, I’m going to ace my IELTS once and achieve my desired band score.

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If your English level is above band 6.5, but you are stuck at scoring 6.5 – the reason will be your technique and your understanding of IELTS writing task 2. See my free lessons – click on the RED BAR at the top of the site.

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Hello Liz, For Writing task 2, can I use supporting ideas which may or may not be true in real life? for example “A recent survey suggests that most people prefer evenings, to watch movies, rather than mornings”. Is it okay to use this kind of made-up sentences?

You should not be using phrases such as “A recent survey suggests..” – The examiner is not interested in the source of your information.

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Thanks in advance.

This is something you should check with your test centre. They might have a preference about the type of pen used. Good luck on Saturday !! 🙂

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Thankyou so much for tge prompt reply..

Well, what i understand from your reply is that, the question must be clearly answered, with introduction, 2 to 3 body paragraphs, and conclusion, With all required ingredients such as the cohesion, linking words, grammar, spelling, etc.. Right?

I am appearing ielts this month 27th for the fifth time, where,for the first three attempts i got 6 in writing and last time 6.5..i need to score atleast 7 in writing to reach my dream.

I had been confused on the structure of essays, thinking that all essays must have examples compulsorily, and should avoid “ing” forms, etc. It would be of hreat help if you could share link, of essays, that you think i must gp through.

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Yes, you’ve understood. On this page, you’ll find a link to the band score descriptions and tips for how to up your score. You’ll also find model essays, free video lessons, tips etc: https://ieltsliz.com/ielts-writing-task-2/ . Using a gerund (a verb that has become a noun by using +ing) is a very useful grammar feature to include in your essays and certainly shouldn’t be avoided. Examples are used when you wish to use them – they are not compulsory. This site has over 300 pages of lessons and tips – go to the HOME page to learn how to find them on this site.

Thankyou for your valuable sharings and wonderful website which is ocean of knowledge.

Well, i have a doubt in the structing of different type of essays in task 2. My mentor taught me that there must be example in every para after the main point mentioned in each paragraphs.

But i could not find that pattern in your essay samples. Is the method i follow right or wrong. Please advice.

Smruthi India Kochi

There is no such rule in IELTS. The examiner only marks if you have explained and developed your ideas in a relevant way. You need to distinguish between advice your teacher is giving you and actual fixed rules for the test. There a lot of flexibility for body paragraph content. In fact, if you are aiming for a high score, you need to be flexible.

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I’m so pleased you are enjoying my site 🙂

Okay, I got it. 🙂

your website is highly advertised by our local IELTS teachers in the Philippines. Is it okay to use “they, these, our, their” on WT2? Thanks for your help!

There are no rules about using pronouns in IELTS. Teachers have their own recommendations of what to use to help you produce a better essay, but there are no fixed rules.

Dear Liz, Some people say that we should answer both parts of the question equally, meaning that we should write almost the same number of words in answering each part of the question, and that otherwise it might be considered ” addressing some parts of the question more fully than others” Is this correct ? because I noticed you wrote far more about the first part of the question than the second one in this essay. Thank you for your amazing website.

An essay which does not develop each idea fully, does not look like this model. It would have 2 sentences for one body paragraph, 6 for another and may be 4 for another – it would be very obviously unbalanced. The essay above has either 3 or 4 sentences for each body paragraph – that’s completely fine.

Can we ask a question in our essayand then answer it, do this type of writing allowed?

Hi Liz, I am writing here one introduction passage of one agree or disagree essay. Kindly let me know the errors. Thanks a lot in advance. Some people consider price as most important thing to consider when buying a product (such as cell phone) or a service (e.g. medical treatment) . DO you agree ordisagree?

Nowadays, cost of product and services is the first dominating issue to get and collect the things to a number of people. Other aspects to consider not only expenditure but also important to find the quality of materials and facility. I completely agree that the cost is the key issue to decide before buying but I also prefer to get the best quality of service and ingredients of products.

Thank you for your blog and video tutorials. I had a question regarding essays on the topic of Art. Is Art being referred to in a broader sense including all forms of expression, or is it just confined to paintings and drawings?

I want you to go online and google the difference between:

1) art 2) the arts

Thanks Liz, I just learnt the difference between the two words too. Actually they are two different words that convey different meanings. Art means fine art such as painting, drawing or sculpture. Arts represent subjects such as commerce, economics, philosophy, history and other such non-science subjects. This is the main difference between the two words.

Exactly – you got it 🙂

Great website, material and effort, thanks alot.

In the conclusion paragraph you wrote “their thoughts” while referring to a “child”, Is child plural or singular in that case??

Please google about using “they” as a singular.

Thanks so much Liz, I sat my IELTS reading, writing and listening tests today and all your lessons and practice qns really helped me alot. Thank you, i hope for the best. God bless you and all your efforts. Thank you once again.

in your second body paragraph, you wrote “art CULMINATES child’s imagination..” , when you are actually supporting art for children.. culminate means end, finish, terminate or conclude.. i think it doesn’t ft in here.

is it true that same words are not counted again?? e.g if I’ve written toys word 5 times , it is considered only 1 time.

All words are counted. This means ALL. Repeated words are counted – ALL words on the page. Do you really think the examiner will count how many times you use “a” or “the” and then calculate? Of course not.

Hlo I want to know about writing that in the time of checking both writing task they count each and every word OR they do not count like is ,am ,are I am confused in word count for both the easy please mam please help me Please mam please help me

ALL words are counted – ALL means ALL.

Hi Liz, I am preparing myself for general IELTS exam. Recently, I have started preparing myself for Task 2 writing but i am very confused because i can’t differentiate what are the academic and general IELTS essay. This section looks very difficult to me. I am too much worried and have fear in my mind that i won’t be able to score in this section. I need your special guidance for this task. You have given 20 common essay topic and each topic is further split into other topic. In addition you have given 100 essay question. This has made me confused. Please advise me what should i prepare for my general IELTS exam. Thanks

There is no major difference. As you can see on this page: https://ieltsliz.com/ielts-gt-academic-writing-differences/

Hi Liz Thanks for these awesome writing lessons.

I am trying to copy the text to get the count of words but I think right click is disabled here and even Ctrl+F is not working. Can you please suggest how can I get it ?

Sorry but my website materials are to be used when you are online. Some pages have pdf files available but most do not.

thanks for your given extraordinory writing.. i have a question related introduction and whole writing task 2 ….. can i use the word in intro like “history has wittnessed”, and ” scholars said that….” .. like these word can i impliment in intro. ..

Using language that you have memorised in order to impress the examiner will not help you.

Hi, l would like to thank you for your great efforts and support to all IELTS students , l have one question , is it normal in the above essay ,that term Secondly is missing in the third paragraph.

Starting the first paragraph with Firstly, the second with Secondly, and the third with Thirdly, is considered mechanical and this is a characteristic of band score 6. So, be flexible.

Wow! This essay is so good. How am I expected to write like this?? 🙁

Thank you madam, Please, i am confused when to put personal examples on my essay paragraphs. I did notice you used none?

It is recommended to writing about people in general rather than people you know personally.

Hi Liz. I’ve been reading your articles and watching all lecture videos here and I can say that I am a fan. I can’t deny that your materials are all helpful in preparation of my Ielts. I also noticed that you are trying your best to answer all the queries asked by most of the candidates. Eventhough you’ve mentioned that you’re not commenting on their essays, it seems that you still take the time to read, check and give your opinions and feedbacks regarding their written work. I’m not here to ask the same, fyi 😉 I just want to extend my gratitude for helping us without asking for any return. I’m just happy that people like you still do exist. Kudos!

Hi I wanted to know is it really obligatory to say in essays like “in this essay I’ll outline my opinion or solution or something like that with examples.?

Nope, it would be wrong. You have to write in general terms.

Hi Miss Liz… I would like to ask regarding the topic below:

Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money should be spent elsewhere. To what extend do you agree?

I fully agree with the topic and my reason are 1. There are crucial problems, which need to be addressed and funded right away, such as poverty, crimes, illiteracy and deteriorating public health, that the government faces. 2. Only few people appreciate arts which makes it insensible to allot money for it.

Do you think my reasons answered the task completely or did i deviate from the topic? I’m not really sure about my reasons ( body 1 and 2). Thanks Miss Liz. Godbless.

You have presented a clear opinion and present clear ideas to support your view. It’s fine. Liz

Hi. I have noticed reading your model essays that you don’t usually list examples into your body paragraphs. Some instructors suggest examples should be added in almost all of body paragraphs one writes. A relevant example could be of child art prodigy ‘Akiane’ in my view. Don’t you think by not using any examples , it can impede chances to achieve band 8 or band 9? At least , that’s my understanding after reading through countless blogs and going through online videos of other instructors. Kindly enlighten me with your views. Thanks

Examples are not necessary. Yes, you can use them. But it won’t impede your score not to. Examples can also take the form of giving examples of situations rather than data or statistics or individual examples. All the best Liz

hi,liz can we state our opinion in ‘positive development or negative development’ essay. And while stating our opinion,where asked, in any type of essay what should be the arrangement of BPs. In agree disagree essay,the BP should be only according to our answer,e.g i agree ,so BP should all be in favor of agree?i am confused

Sorry I don’t actually understand your question. I highly recommend you watch at least one of my advanced lessons which explains in a lot of detail how to write an opinion essay: http://subscriptions.viddler.com/IELTSLizStore All the best Liz

Hello I’ve noticed that you have never used a semicolon in your essays before. Is using semicolon instead of periods and commas in some sentences is better and gives more points?

Just use commas and full stops. Liz

Dear Liz can you write a structure of Direct Essay? Thank you.

A direct essay is one where you are given specific questions to answer. On the whole, you have one body paragraph for each question. Liz

Thanku for clarifying the structure of direct question.i.e,”one body para for each question”.

For most cases, that will be a good guideline. But always have a flexible approach and don’t think in black and white terms.

hi Liz can you advise if this is okay?

Q: artist have low salaries. Do you think the government should provide a buget for them to increase their salaries?

Arts play an important role in our lives and artists should be compensated accordingly. However, in my opinion, the government should focus their budget more on critical issues in our society such as poverty, education and health. In this essay, I will discuss the importance of allocating the budget to these social problems.

To begin with, the government should concentrate on issues that directly affects the people in the society. The public funds should spend to create jobs to unemployed, promote education by creating more schools and provide affordable hospitalization and medical programs to the poor. These are vital in order for the society to function. Ultimately, when these problems has been resolved, economy will prosper, thus, increasing the budget of the government.

On the other hand, arts also generate income from entrace fees in the museum and art galleries. Some people enjoy arts and have financial capacity to spend money for arts. However, these does not warrant concrete reason for artists to get an increased on their salary.

In conclusion, government should prioritize the allocation of the budget on the projects that directly affects people’s lives .

Sorry, I no longer comment on writing. Liz

Just a question in the second paragraph. “children will struggle in grow into dynamic …..”

or it should be children will struggle to grow into dynamic….

Well spotted! It’s a typo. You’re a good proof reader 🙂 Liz

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46 good spm english model essays / free essay samples for o-level, ielts, toefl & muet writing, 46 model essay samples for spm english, o-level, ielts, toefl & muet writing,         descriptive essays.

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Same and im goin through mid year exams rn...smh

Me, a 12 year old that wants to write longer than the word limit in primary school: wow, this is cool

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